~So Faith here has decided to send in another one, so let's get right on with the show!~

Name: Rapidkit/Rapidpaw/Rapidclaw/Rapidstar
Nice combination of unique with classic, I like it!

Gender: She-cat
Pretty common.

Rank: Leader
I'm interested to see how she climbed to become the leader!

Age: 94 moons
Upmost respect! That's old! Such a wise kitty she must be.

Clan: MountainClan
Again, like the name of if. Probably Thunderclan.

Looks: She's a scarred, large black she-cat with sharp green eyes. Her fur is very long but dull. Her claws are long and sharp. She's missing her left ear.
Cool! She seems very experienced and wise.

Personality: Where do I start... She's the most loyal cat you'll ever meet, Snappy with she's tired, protective, kind-hearted, Clever
Nice balanced personality! I'm having trouble finding anything wrong dang! Giving me a run for my money here!

Backstory: Oh gosh... Let's start for the very beginning. Her mother, Deathwing, and her father, Stripepelt, had two beautiful kits: Riverkit and Rapidkit. She was named Rapidkit because when she was a kit, she'd do every as fast as she could. She was even born super fast! Deathwing was always snappy, so her and her brother hung at with their best friend. Foxkit. Rapidkit always thought he was a handsome kit. Anyways, Deathwing made an excuse and became a warrior once more when Rapidkit and Riverkit were four moons Rapidpaw was given the mentor, Cougarstar because her father was the deputy and Cougarstar was impressed with Rapidkit. Her apprentice days were boring. Foxpaw(his mentor being Deathwing) stopped being friends with Rapidpaw. He had a massive crush on Deathwing! Rapidpaw and Riverpaw were very close. One thing that sticks out of her apprentice day was her father being murdered! Murdered! It was the day when she and her brother watched the deputy being killed and threw into North Fish Pond. It crushed her. Stripepelt and Rapidpaw were close. It was this day, Rapidpaw knew how evil her mother was. Riverpaw and Rapidpaw never told anyone, afraid of the clan think it was lies. Another thing that sticks out was a fine young warrior. Sleetclaw. A white tom with light gray patches. The two hung out a lot. Such a flirt he was. She fell in love. As the next chapter of her life started, many things were in her mind. The happiest  day of a warrior's life is usually giving your warrior name. Rapidclaw could only remember the new Deputy, Deathwing, and her cold, harsh stare.Her warrior days were crazy. She got the apprentice, Runningpaw. Deathwing and Foxheart got close. It was obvious Foxheart loved her but Deathwing didn't care. Runnningpaw was a kind but stupid apprentice. After Runningpaw became Runningsky, Rapidclaw decided she wanted kits. When Rapidclaw was one moon pregnant, something terrible happened. A kit was murdered. Honeykit. Windkit was almost dead. The clan found out it was Deathwing. Riverpelt came out that he and Rapidclaw watched Stripepelt being murdered. Deathwing was exiled, though not surprisingly, Foxheart did come with her. Whiteheart was deputy. Rapidclaw had two beautiful kits. Sunkit, a pale ginger tom with green eyes, and Freezekit, a white she-kit with amber eyes and huge dark brown paws. After six moons, it happened. Deathwing, Foxheart, and an army of rouges attacked the camp. There were many deaths. Sunkit, Whiteheart, Riverpelt, and many many more. Rapidclaw was almost killed by Deathwing. Like Scar holding Mufasa, Deathwing held Rapidclaw. Deathwing made the mistake of talking to Rapidclaw too long that Whiteheart saved her. He traded his life for hers. Whiteheart and Deathwing both fell off the cliff. Foxheart survived the attack and was taken prisoner. He escaped. He body was last found at the bottom of a different cliff. Rapidclaw, even though young, was appointed deputy and was giving the apprentice, Windpaw. Her daughter, Freezepaw, was mentored by an unknown warrior. Bouncefoot joined MountainClan. When Cougarstar died, Rapidstar appointed Windbreeze but Windbreeze died from redcough. Rapidstar is a happy leader with Bouncefoot as her deputy.
Long and detailed, nice! I like the struggle here, and there's not to much death (Though it may be getting there with one or to more), and it's balanced well. The talent woman I swear.

Mate: Sleetclaw
Reminds me of a cat this is about..Rapidclaw. It's a bit strange that they both have the suffix claw, but still I like the name. Nice!

Kits: Sunkit and Freezestorm
Why did the only not cold one have to dieeeee nuhhhhhh XD. The names of your mate and kits are fine, there just following a trend. Wait did warriors even have trends. I must find this out!

Other: None
Okay.

Finial Results:
MarySueness: 3%

That is your Oc! Fabulous! Giving me a run for my money here with these to fabulous Oc's. Or maybe I'm just not judging you harsh enough. Hmmmm.